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Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The progress usually means that world can become incredibly better in the terms of social life, science, history, technology, modernization and other. For me personally progress has played a significant role in my life. I would like to stress on the technological progress. It would seem unbelievable to me when 20 years ago someone told me that in 20 years there will be no need to have a landline phone in your house if you need to talk with someone on the phone, there will be little need in post services and even more there will be no need to have a TV! It really is incredible how developed we are now. Just think that you can be reached wherever you are just by having your cellular phone with you and indeed there is no need in landline. Thanks to internet we can send anything by electronic mail, letters, documents, photos and moreover you can have a video call with the person who is on the other side of the world and all of this might be absolutely confidential. As for the TV it is interesting but you need to have your laptop and internet connection in order to be in the loop of all your favorite shows. I recently discovered that apparently it is possible even to watch movies online! Isn't this incredible? You don't have to go anywhere just stay indoors and google the movie that you want to watch online and for free. From the other side I hear all the time from grown ups or other people who are so called "nature defenders" that the concept of the technology progress is hidden somewhere deep in the forest and has its own goals which are to destroy entire mankind. For instance recently I bumped into such saying "People becoming so helpless without an internet, how would they live when the whole empire of internet will fall down?" Surely it would make our entire life very difficult but at the end of the day we are not giving up: ordinary mail services, landlines cinemas and TV right? We are still using them. So in order to conclude with I would say that I don't think we ever will give up ordinary post services, cinemas and TVs and landline phones since all this has its own advantages. Otherwise we would give up all these long time ago and became cyborgs with installed microchips that were responsible for all our human beings functions.
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Prompt: Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
Progress has different definitions. One some of the most popular definition of progress is moving forward. Nowadays, people can see progress in different aspects of life such as industry, agriculture and communication. Even though many people think that progress is a positive thing, I think that progress is not always good, and in this essay I will explain my opinion.
Nowadays, there are many technological developments such as Internet, mobile communication, television and computers which make people's lives easier and more comfortable. All of these improvements have some advantages and disadvantages. For example, Internet gives people ability to communicate with people who are in different locations. Internet has many benefits; with the help of Internet people may easily get new knowledge, watch news, communicate with friends, sell or buy products etc. Nowadays, it is hardly possible to imagine our world without Internet. On the other hand, there are also strong scientific facts which state that the intense usage of the Internet limit interactions of people and make them less social; and maybe people may spend most of the day on the Internet; and the world may become absolutely virtual. Mobile phones also very useful and comfortable for communication but many scientists postulate that mobile phones may bring about cancer.
With rapidly increasing industrialization our world becomes more polluted especially in the "developing countries" such as China and India. Many multinational companies transfer their factories and other operations to the developing countries because of the availability of cheap labor and raw materials. People who live in and near developing countries cannot breathe fresh air; animals cannot survive because of chemical waste left in their environment. These factories pollute ground water and then humankind may have a lack of clean water. Pollution is one of the main reasons for human diseases.
Another reason why I think that progress is not always good is that almost all developments make people's lives more nervous, stressful and can cause psychological disorders because there many competitions in every aspect of life.
To sum up, by explaining some of effects of progress above, it is obvious that progress is not always positive. Progress always has two sides ï bad and good; when Einstein was creating atomic bomb he was not thinking about the catastrophe which this bomb would make in Hiroshima and Nagasaki, he was thinking about the progress. Progress depends on the cultural level of the people who use the results of progress. I believe that in the future people will be reasonable and avert the negative side of progress. I will try to contribute to the prevention of the negative side of progress.
In this genre of essay, markers would look for how you balanced your arguments. Not quite necessarily to cite numerous examples but more importantly use these examples to support your arguments. Perhaps you could try developing a concept of the positive and negative use of progress. In these concepts, you develop similar patterns, ideology, effects, etc. And then take a sample progress and fit it in.
One of the most popular definitions of progress is moving forward
For example, Internet has many benefits: it gives people ability to communicate with people who are in different locations, with the help of Internet, people may easily get new knowledge, watch news, communicate with friends, sell or buy products etc.
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On the other hand (Start with a new paragraph)
Cut short the sentences and avoid irrelevant or repetitive ideas.
Your essay shows that you have the concept of why progress is not always good.